LI: To edit our writing using DRAFT.
This week continued writing our abstract noun poem about Bravery. We included descriptive words and used the 5 senses which are: See, smell, feel/touch,and taste.When we finished our poem we used DRAFT to check our work, this means delete, rearrange, add, fix and talk. DRAFT is looking closely at your work and making any changes to improve it.
We used word hippo to look for more powerful words to use.
LI: To write an abstract noun senses poem
For our writing task this week we are working on poems and metaphors. Our metaphor poem was about sadness. A metaphor is describing something as something else without using “like” or “as.” An abstract noun is a noun describing an idea, for example see, taste, feel, smell and hear. We worked on this task as a group. After coming up with our poem we create a DLO.
This task was fun because we learned how much creativity we have
LI: To recount a 5 minute snapshot of one experience you had at camp
I could feel my excitement flow all over my body as I hoped into the kayak. My whole group was getting ready to bring the rest of the kayaks down as the instructor pushed me out into the water.
The water was cold as I touched it with my hands. I started paddling towards my friend. And keep on bump to my friend boat Then the boat bump and flip over and I fell in the water but I was laughing and then my friend let me grab her so she pulled me to land . but I was wet Then it was to go i grab the boat and keep on walking and went up to the the camp and i change my clothes
Last week we went to camp at Kokako Lodge. My 5 minute snapshot shows my personal voice and I have tried hard to paint a picture with my words to describe what I was doing and how I felt.I found this activity great because i get learn new suff and i was happy about my self
LI: To use powerful words and transitional vocabulary to make our writing more interesting
This week we have been learning to use transitional vocabulary to help us link ideas between the sentences in our paragraph. The transitional words are like the doors we walk through and to show how this works in writing we have highlighted them. I enjoyed this activity because we got to try using new words in our writing and we worked collaboratively so we got to share our ideas.
LI: to understand why staying hydrated is important for our health and our learning.
regularly makes you hydrated and full of energy, but the opposite is being dehydrated. Being dehydrated is when your body isn’t getting enough water that it needs. This causes tiredness, lack of energy, dry lips, and dark colored urine.
In groups of 2-4 we created a DLO explaining why being hydrated is good for both health and learning. In my group was ****add names. After reading this DLO I hope you have a good understanding on why is it very important to keep hydrated by drinking water.
LI: To write an explanation using TEEL paragraphs
LI: To write an explanation
How many times did you throw rubbish and did not care what might happen to the sea creatures?
It is important to think about where we put our rubbish because some rubbish ends up in the sea. Many sea creatures are dying just because people are being careless. The ocean will be full of rubbish and sea creatures will eat the plastic because they think it is their food. An example is our seabirds who often end up with plastic on their beaks and are not able to breathe.
How many sea creatures have people killed by doing this? Stop throwing your rubbish on the ground!
This is my explanation that tells other people why it is important to make wise choices when they throw away their rubbish. I wrote this after planning my ideas and thinking about what what questions I could ask that would make the people reading this think about the choices they make.
